
Well … off we go on our first part of our journey straight through the Soviet Union with the TSR up to Vladivostok and finally we will arrive at Shikoku Island. I combined a Haiku pared with an American Sentence. Special thanks to Bjorn.
Written for Carpe Diem.
Clouds out my window
violin strings are in the air
a leaving behind
Reflecting on the pleasure of the journey that will be my future.
Table chair bowl of fruit
train whistles mark my journey
a new life begins
Ha… your comments are very much appreciated… I learned about american sentences a while ago.. to me I think they lend themselves to capture a level of grittiness that went goes well with cities and trainstation…
Ginsburg was after all well aware of Haiku poetry and he was a Buddhist.. but the sentenses works in some instanses where haiku don’t. To put in som level of juxtaposition and think of them as haiku helps.
Actually some of the one-line haiku’s by Lolly and Wabi are similar to American Sentenses in a way..
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I’m learning! Thanks for the read and thoughtful comment.
DJ
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Is the journey the future or the now? 😉
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Not to be evasive; but both.
Thanks for the read.
DJ
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This is a great response on our prompt for today Danny … I like this combining two kinds of poetry a lot. Of course I am more of the haiku, but the American Sentence sounds great too. However I hadn’t heard earlier of American Sentences. Read that for the first time in Bjorn’s post for today’s Carpe Diem prompt.
Thank you for sharing and being a participant in Carpe Diem Haiku Kai.
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My pleasure!
Thanks for the read. I also read Bjorn’s post and it gave me the idea to try that format.
DJ
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Bjorn is amazing. 🙂 This was lovely…especially violin strings in the air.
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Thanks Anja! Sometimes I understand Bjorn and then……sometimes not. But he is excellent.
DJ
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hahaha He is one of my favorites 🙂
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