Photo Fiction

photo fiction

The rain outside inspires my dark thoughts

Drifting away, drifting away from this lonely church

I’m sitting up here by myself

We both know I’m not alone

Something in this putrid air makes me feel so empty

Perhaps it’s the rain or the coffin below me

Soon you will join me

Until your journey I will bemoan

If you could move a little closer please

I could tell you more about this retched city

My heart still knows your mine

If they only knew, if they only knew how pretty

So here I am

I don’t want to be alone

But now I have to ask

Why you put that knife in my back

9 thoughts on “Photo Fiction

  1. freyathewriter October 22, 2013 / 12:19 pm

    Twisting the knife right at the end there… 🙂
    I loved the hypnotic quality of this – the repetition of phrases was an excellent motif.


    • Danny James October 23, 2013 / 8:27 pm

      Thanks for your thoughtful comment. I appreciate it.



  2. anelephantcant October 21, 2013 / 2:51 pm

    AnElephant loves all the jollity this week!
    Well crafted tale, enjoyed it.


    • Danny James October 23, 2013 / 8:28 pm

      Thanks! Like the fact that the anelephantcant likes my post.



  3. zookyworld October 21, 2013 / 1:10 pm

    A neat surprise at the end, as it turned around my opinion of the narrator… at first, I thought he was looking to do some evil deeds, but then it turns out an evil deed had been done to him.


    • Danny James October 23, 2013 / 8:32 pm

      One of my characters do an evil deed? Almost always but not this time. Appreciate your comment.



  4. Al October 20, 2013 / 5:47 pm

    I like that. I love that little twist at the end. I suppose the twist of the knife.


    • Danny James October 20, 2013 / 6:19 pm

      Yup! Thanks for the comment and I like your posts also.



      • Al October 20, 2013 / 6:21 pm

        Thank you Danny. I appreciate that 🙂


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