The Last Text   18 comments

This short story is written for Friday Fictioneers.


PHOTO PROMPT © Sarah Potter

Another late night at the office was nothing new to her. As part of a high profile litigation team it was expected. The weather outside her office reflected her dark and cold mood.

The amount of time she spent here was taking a toll on her life outside of work. It was the reason her husband had left and her daughter was in therapy.

The sudden whistle from her cell phone alerted her of a text.

The text in the last bubble said: “This is Detective Ryan of the Detroit Police Department, please call 1-810-5555.”

The one above read: “I’m jumping.”

Posted February 23, 2017 by Danny James in Friday Fictioneers

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18 responses to “The Last Text

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  1. Powerful lines.

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  2. This life is full of choices. It’s not always easy to know which the right ones to choose are.

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  3. That’s so painful it’s hard to click on like. She’ll never get over that.

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  4. I can only try to imagine how she will go on from that point… some major changes needed.

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  5. Powerful. But the implied guilt that she, as mother should bear, leaves me uneasy.

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    • Understand your concern. The story is based on a novel called “Reconstructing Amelia.” A good read if you have the time. Thanks for taking the time to comment.



      • I didn’t mean to imply that you approved. It’s something I notice often, when a woman is killed climbing a mountain for instance, we hear mutterings to the effect that she was a bad mother for risking her life. You never hear it said of a man, even when the accident was particularly stupid, that he was a bad father.

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  6. Tragic, I guess sometimes it is too late.

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  7. That is a terrifying last line. Even if she managed to stuff down her regrets earlier that day, there is no way she can avoid dealing with them now. Scary cautionary tale.

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  8. The last line, and her reaction (or lack of obvious reaction) to it tells its own story… and it’s a terrible one. Wow.

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  9. Goodness – that packed a punch.

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  10. Oh the price she is paying for her choice… will haunt her forever.

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  11. Dramatic take. I think she is going to be blaming herself for what’s happened. Well written.

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  12. Ouch! I can only imagine just such a scenario, well written, indeed! 🙂 ❤

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