This post is written for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. This is a flash fiction challenge (stories in 100-175 words or less) and each story should have a beginning, a middle, and an end. This week’s photo prompt is provided by Sonya O. My story follows the picture prompt.
So there you are big brother.
The one I always despised. Hell “hated” is a more descriptive adjective.
Wonder what you looked like when you died. Wrinkled like me?
Mommy always gave you everything while I had to work my buns off to just get by.
That’s why I never talked to you for the last fifty years.
Fifty frigging years Albert! You made my life hell buddy just thinking about your success.
Oh, and my failure now that I think about it.
You did one thing right big guy. You married a wonderful women. Too bad she left you for me. Hope that didn’t have anything to do with your nasty exit from this world.
Just thought we would say goodbye brother.
Great story, Danny! I can understand that kind of disdain… love the twist at the end!
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Thanks for commenting. Some people can relate.
DJ
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You are most welcome 🙂
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Oh wow, it seems to me like.getting his borther’s woman was one heck of a payback. I hope little brother doesn’t die with so much anger too.
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Interesting viewpoint. You may be right. Thanks for commenting.
DJ
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That sounds like a rather tense relationship. Living with such hatred for 50 years couldn’t have been a pleasant or healthy experience! Good story. 🙂
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Very unhealthy! He’s got a few issues that he needs to work through.
DJ
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What a story! He at least had one triumph upon his brother. Good onE
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Wowza, such a sad story–true for many.
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Yup! Change some characters in their and I may have a story that is similar. Thanks for stopping by!
DJ
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To live with so much hatred must eat up one internally, not to mention the possible guilt further down the line.
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Yup! Guilt must have eaten him up for a long time.
DJ
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Great story…this type of thing does happen in real life! ….unfortunately.
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Yup! Close to home for me. Thanks for stopping by.
DJ
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Thanks. That comment is so true. Thanks for commenting.
DJ
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O boy not a happy bunch.
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You got that right!
DJ
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Wow! Certainly death can be a blessed relief on both sides ~ Well written DJ.
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Thanks John.
DJ
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It sounds to me like not much love was lost when his older brother died. It must be hell living with that much hatred. I like the twist you took with your story Danny – lots of emotion!
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Thank you! Always appreciate your comments.
DJ
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