It was the bright colors of the fall leaves that reminded him of where he was. This is where he was raised. He had to come back one last time. Father, Mother, and Younger Sister were here, waiting his visit. Some bright leaves and uncut grass marked their place.
A new season starts
Years past like forgotten dreams
He makes the first step
Full of feeling. Well done.
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Thanks for stopping by. Enjoyed your comment.
DJ
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your words made it seem very real – felt his first step. i enjoyed your offering.
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Thanks so much for your comment. Very thoughtful.
DJ
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Very strong haibun, DJ – no doubts you were there and also brought me along. Emotional, touching and well written.
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Thank you! I appreciate your thoughtful comments.
DJ
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Welcome to the haibun world ๐ I enjoyed your piece. It is not easy to convey so much in so few words. Very well done ๐
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Thanks for the welcome and your comments. Look forward to more challenges.
DJ
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Nice one Danny. A few words, saying a lot. That’s what haiku / haibun writing’s all about.
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Thanks! My first try. Appreciate your comment.
DJ
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I echo Penny here, leaving no doubt about the feelings expressed. There was much emotion and power in few words. The writing felt therapeutic – thanks for coming on board.
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My pleasure and thanks for your comment.
DJ
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So very moving… thank you.
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I am glad you enjoyed and thanks for taking the time to comment. It’s appreciated.
DJ
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You’re welcome!
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This s a powerful haibun, very short and yet full of emotions. You were able to convey your messages brilliantly. ๐
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Thanks for the comment, I tried to have the reader think s/he was beside me at the grave site.
DJ
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Hello Danny, I enjoyed your haibun, very much. Well written, vivid and clear, yet provocatively emotional, leaving no doubt as to the feelings being felt and why. Thank you for sharing!
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Thank you very much for your comment. It was surprising easy for me to write. But I did try to convince you that you were there beside me.
DJ
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And you did exceedingly well! I was there too!
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