It’s time again for Friday Fictioneers. Here goes!
The scene before him was exactly like the one she sent him over the internet. They had been exchanging posts for over a year. He felt closer to her than any of the girls he went to college with. The fact that he majored in Spanish helped immensely. The pictures she sent of herself put him into a lover’s daze. He had scraped together enough money for a one way ticket with the assurance her family would pay for the return trip. Being here now he realized something was missing. Where are all the people. Maria….Maria.
Oh Danny Boy! 
Ah, the old “holiday to meet girl with no return ticket and place is deserted” scam. I hope he finds a way home!
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He may be stuck there. Ouch!
DJ
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Really, you can’t trust the internet for love – unless they have been vetted and then it’s still scary! I hope he has an International cell phone. Golly gee whiz, creepy! Love it! Nan 🙂
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Knowing him as I do, I doubt he thought of an international cell phone. Partly true story by the way!
DJ
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Lost with no way back.. that’s not good.. I had a feeling that the lovers hope would not end well—
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You’re correct. Thanks Bjorn.
DJ
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Indeed! Where are all the people? I love that it’s not only Maria that is missing. Kudos!
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Many thanks!
DJ
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Good one. Took me by surprise. Run, boy, run.
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Thanks for the read.
DJ
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Aahhh love over the internet. It’s rarely as it seems.
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True! Story actually based loosely on a friend’s son.Thanks for commenting.
DJ
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Man…just goes to show the risks you take can just fire back in your face. I wonder where she went? Or better yet, does she really exist?
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I think that is exactly what he is thinking now. Thanks for the comment.
DJ
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You built that up well to an ambiguous but ominous ending, Danny. I think that if you varied the length of your sentences a bit, the story would read more smoothly. For instance, the second and third could easily be made into one longer sentence, breaking up the run of shorter sentences. And a ? at the end of “Where were all the people?” Just my $.02, for what that’s worth. 🙂
janet
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It’s worth a lot! And I agree. The missing ? was my omission. Thanks again for the constructive criticism.
DJ
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Dear Danny,
Things aren’t always what they seem, are they? Good one.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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That’s true!
DJ
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This is an ominous ending, but part of me wants to think they’re all having a siesta.
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Ya snooze ya lose :-8
DJ
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It’s interesting that your story goes right after another one titled Maria, so I couldn’t help and tied them together. So, he better hurry up and stop the wedding.
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Good story. :)This would also be a great hook for a longer story. Poor guy. He may have to work to earn his passage home. 😦
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The work may be more trouble than he expects.
DJ
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Oh no!He has been had-poor chap!
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A love starved sucker.
DJ
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Ha!ha!But then most of us are suckers for love,no DJ? 🙂
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I take the fifth. Or was she the third. -:}
DJ
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lol!
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It’s not going to end well. Great set up.
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Thanks! I think he’s in for some big trouble.
DJ
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Poor guy…
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He will never learn.\\DJ
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Uh-oh, sounds like things went bad. Loved the chilling end to this.
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Thanks!
DJ
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